My dear, to find what´s long forgotten...


Waves of same and life at hand:

but changing shores of Neverland

Rest and calm in cheerfull storms

O, ocean in its purest form


A shadow crab on sand performing

a sunlit act in early morning

"Forgettness me, forgettnes you..."

forever play the Great is true


In water stand you near the shore:

feet well buried like before

Tip of tounge can reach the dry

But body stuck and try and try


O, born in water heart needs land

the everlasting change of Neverland



Postat av: CND

You changed the last the version you sent me before it said in the last line:

'the everchange of Neverland'

...which I think works better, 'everchange' is a neologism, rich, rhythmically tighter, surely more what you are after?

The crab, the crab. Always going sideways cos he can't find reverse.

2009-01-09 @ 01:49:51

Kommentera inlägget här:

Kom ihåg mig?

E-postadress: (publiceras ej)



RSS 2.0